well, it's quite good. however, it looks like you're trying to translate more than thinking french, but it's a good start
et la seconde personne du pluriel se traduit par "vous" en français et non par "tu"
[/la leçon française de noël]
anyway, can u tell us more about your project?
you should introduce urself in the proper section "OnlyBar" "présentation des nouveaux membres"
welcome here though !!